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of the night
uncountable eyes
listen.
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uncountable eyes
listen.
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Nel sipario nero
della notte
innumerevoli occhi
ascoltano.
innumerevoli occhi
ascoltano.
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Oh, this is beautiful, both the English and the Italian version.
I think maybe the second 'the' could be removed, as to have two 'the's in quick succession, especially in a short piece like this, seems a bit too much. Maybe this would change the rhythm too much though (I'm not very good at judging that, sorry!).
The part "uncountable eyes / listen." is my favourite because it makes me think of stars watching over us.
I think maybe the second 'the' could be removed, as to have two 'the's in quick succession, especially in a short piece like this, seems a bit too much. Maybe this would change the rhythm too much though (I'm not very good at judging that, sorry!).
The part "uncountable eyes / listen." is my favourite because it makes me think of stars watching over us.