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Glorious star
slowly emerges
from the billows,
paints the stubborn surface
in shades of golden crimson,
every hue meets
buttermilk sky above.

I'm wandering alone
In the hyacinth dawn


Sun rays
stir waves
through the clouds,
in the distance, little toy boats,
black against the light,
figures of a shadow theatre
on the shore.
A flock of terns
suddenly rises,
concert of wings.

I wish to be
weightless in the wind


The morning shines now
waters white & serene,
salty air speaks of a new 
hopeful day, 
smooth swells wash away
memory of my passage,
shells and pebbles
rock back & forth,
in a gentle 
lullaby.

Nostalgia
like the ocean
kind of blue.
For blackoutpoet contest: Pictures from words 
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really beautiful!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome so much!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Student General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
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Why the heck would I want to participate in a contest against THIS!?

KABOOM!

After the first few lines, I felt the urge to read ahead (because I'm slow) but I didn't.
Then I went back up to the title (totally fair) and still didn't get it. But I did not read ahead. (still wanted to, though)
At that point I started taking notes because my brain only holds so many things at once.
Then after starting the second block, I thought, "Okay, it's a sunrise... very nicely painted"
Then the little italic subtexts (or whatever they're called) poked me in the eye, but I was on a roll so I kept going.

Your imagery of the wax and wane of the tide, by the way... I could see it.  The arrangement of the words helped, too I think; though it's hard to tell after the fact.

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Anyway - nicely done, Isabella. It's beautiful.
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Now, this must be the bestestest comment ever Trophy Heart  

I'm sorry for the little italic subtext being rude though, if it won't behave I'll erase it!

Thank you, Nathan, for your epic words, I'm so very glad you think it's beautiful Tight Hug 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
My pleasure, Isabella!

And the poke in the eye was a good one - I would prefer you leave the italics right where they are. Subtext is good because it increases the reader's focus (albeit by force - hehe)

Off to work I go. Have a good one!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Okay then, I'll leave the italics where they are, (they're so cute :D (Big Grin) )

Thanks again, Nathan, I wish you a lovely day! Sun 
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tuiskulumi Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
This sounds like a lovely morning. The peace is unmatched and nothing beats a feeling like this. 
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you. I'm glad you can feel the peace of the morning described here, I was trying to create a picture.
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