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I watch you
cutting strawberries
in the amber afternoon,
sun on its midway 
to autumn;
you won't let me help
because secretly
only half of them
make it to the bowl.
          
I smile back 
at your playful eyes
because
you know.
   
It feels like
an old August,
in my stomach
some sort of sadness
some sort of joy.

Last night's thunderstorm
has left the ocean agitated,
wildly 
beautiful.
Life is nothing
but a vacant place, today
and we shall
let it be,
let the world
wait for us, today.

Cross legged
on my piano bench,
I play for the cat
a winter Debussy
she's happy,
I could tell
she smiles.
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Given 2014-05-22
An Old August by AlwaysRainCheck is, as the suggester says, filled with "pleasant yearning, slightly tinged with melancholy". Aggressive enjambment highlights an ordinary day and enriches it with meaning. ( Suggested by ezradeacon and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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AmethystVixen Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2015  Student Writer
Whenever I pick berries, the exact same thing happens to me!
Only half of them make it to the house. Strange, I have no idea how that happened. ^^;
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2015  Student General Artist
Hahaha I know right...it's such a mystery. :pothead: 
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AmethystVixen Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2015  Student Writer
One that'll never be solved... :giggle:
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2015   Writer
This is beautiful.
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2015  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :heart: 
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Simply beautiful.  :)
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :) I'm very glad you like it!
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wistful and pleasant
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you very much.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! 

And for the watch as well. :heart:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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Leah084 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014
loved this
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! I'm very glad you like it :heart:
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am not at all surprised that this received a DD. It's exquisite, delicately crafted, filled and brimming with the light that hearkens the change in the year, the pivot from summer into fall. I know this timeless time. I know this place. Share it?
Harbinger Days
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for your kind comment, I'm glad this resonates with you. Heart 

And thank you for sharing, I can feel the first light of autumn in your words Clap 
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought you might be someone who, like me, felt that shift in the light, in the wind of change, Earth's polarity subtly changing... :heart:
Thank you for sharing the sojourn!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh yes, it's one of my favorite moments of the year Heart 
Thank you as well! Tight Hug 
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
When the summer shifts this year, expect to hear from me! Squeek Hug Emoticon 
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Haha okay! Redbull glomp 
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014   Writer
Never realised you achieved a DD until now. A splendid poem that truly deserved this accolade. Congratulations and well done!
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh I'm still surprised to be honest (: Thank you so much for your kind words, I'm glad you like it Heart 
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2014   Writer
You're welcome. I think it's a great bit of writing; a masterpiece. I'm still surprised after getting my 2nd DD haha. :)
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student General Artist
Well, coming from a skilled writer like you, I'm deeply honored  Blush 
Oh your latest DD is amazing Heart 
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ezradeacon Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
La la la la  I'm so glad it was selected! Congratulations luv, well deserved. :clap:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Aw, thank you so very much! Hug  Heart 
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Student Writer
Very simple, yet effectively conveying the joy of simple pleasures. Well done. :D
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! Heart 
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Student Writer
You're very welcome. :)
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Shortypaint-pencil Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent work! :D It almost tastes sweet - and the flavour would be strawberries and honey (because this kinda reminds me of a poem called 'Strawberries' by Edwin Morgan ;))
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you very much for your kind words Heart 

I'm an avid poetry reader, but to be honest I'm not familiar with the work of Edwin Morgan so I thank you also for acquainting me with his beautiful poetry. :) (Smile) 
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StormsAndSwallows Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student General Artist
this is gorgeous, thank you for posting and congrats :)
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you very much for your kind words! Heart 
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dreameroftheblue Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
... this somehow makes me very nostalgic and now there are actual tears in my eyes ;w;
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you for this comment Hug it means a lot,to me, that my words resonates with you.
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TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student
This poem made me feel all warm and nostalgic when I read it C:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much Heart  I'm happy you like this!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so very much! :teamo: Lily Thank you 

:iconhappykitty-plz: Glomp emoticon 
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner May 22, 2014
congrats on the DD, and on achieving perfection.
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you very much Blush you're too kind.
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SolidMars Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations! :la:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! Heart 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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legomaestro Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Man, that poetry... Ifeel nostalgic.
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you Heart I'm glad it resonates with you.
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I adore this! the first few lines + title gripped me immediately. what a lovely, unique atmosphere you've created with simple and delicate words. I would love to be able to write with a skill like that. I and many other writers try to hard with descriptive words sometimes. the 3rd stanza is beautiful, I love it for the feelings it evoked in just a few lines. wow. very happy to have read this. super duper congrats on your DD :hug:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm glad you like this, and well...I deeply admire your work so these compliments coming from you, they really mean a lot. 
Again, thank you Hug 
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow, that means a lot :) thank you. 

you're very welcome! you deserve it. :heart:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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